- 相關(guān)推薦
小技巧助你托福作文滿分
今天下編來分享一位學(xué)霸的托福經(jīng)驗(yàn),喜歡收走。
我考過4次托福(純粹愛好,第一次分就夠了)作文都是滿分,SAT作文也是滿分12分。
說在前面:因?yàn)槲以~匯、語法、句法實(shí)在是不行,所以走的寫作路線是純平民路線,沒有任何SAT詞匯,句法貌似只有定語從句,所以很簡(jiǎn)單……英語基礎(chǔ)和我一樣低等的人也很好上手。
我不是英語高手,我只是作文帝。
首先要搞明白的是,考試中的Essay永遠(yuǎn)不是抒情文、記敘文或者文學(xué)作品,而是議論文,是表現(xiàn)一個(gè)學(xué)生邏輯思考、思想深度以及行文結(jié)構(gòu)表達(dá)方式的載體,所以記住的是“重要的不是你的句法、詞匯,而是你的思想、結(jié)構(gòu)。”
幾個(gè)注意點(diǎn)
1.不要用長(zhǎng)句
新東方作文最牛逼的北京的史愚老師親口教導(dǎo)我的,長(zhǎng)句有兩個(gè)問題,一是中國(guó)學(xué)生水平不夠,很難寫出語法沒有錯(cuò)誤、意思表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確的長(zhǎng)句,語法錯(cuò)誤、幾個(gè)逗號(hào)連用、倒裝從句混合是經(jīng)常的。二是看essay的人也是人,經(jīng)常是那種大學(xué)生研究生,沒人愿意看長(zhǎng)句混在一起的文章,短劇更討人喜歡,并且表達(dá)意思更加清晰,準(zhǔn)確。
2.細(xì)節(jié)要注意
出現(xiàn)My brother, friend的時(shí)候加上名字,出現(xiàn)university的時(shí)候要給上名字,給出事例的時(shí)候要給出時(shí)間地點(diǎn)人物,沒人愿意看“我的弟弟去了一個(gè)大學(xué),然后再大學(xué)里交了很多朋友,后來去了公司里那些朋友成為了他的財(cái)富”,而“我的弟弟Dan去了Upenn讀書,在學(xué)校里認(rèn)識(shí)了Jeff、Dennis等好朋友,而他后來去Google公司工作的時(shí)候發(fā)現(xiàn)了他們成為了自己一生寶貴的財(cái)富”比上面那句好了很多。實(shí)在要寫流水賬也要寫出細(xì)節(jié)和感覺。
3.瞎編要編的像
不解釋
4.自己的事例難寫,最好不要寫
5.積累,積累,再積累
沒有積累和自己獨(dú)立的想法,議論文寫個(gè)吊?
下面就是926考的一題托福題,實(shí)在是想不出來考試時(shí)寫的每句話,大概簡(jiǎn)短的還原一下當(dāng)時(shí)寫的東西,希望有所幫助
It is more important for government to pay attention to health care issues than environmental issues, do you agree or not?
(題目,環(huán)境保護(hù)和醫(yī)療改革哪個(gè)更重要)
"Water and air are the sources of people's lives, and the bases of the world." This was said by the ancient greek philosopher Thales.(開頭引用是最簡(jiǎn)單的,泰勒斯相信水和空氣是最重要的元素,相似的話說過,稍加改動(dòng)就可以出一個(gè)quote)(謝謝45樓的朋友糾正,是Thales說的,不是Hume)Looking at the dirty air in the sky, smelling the gross smell from Yantze River, I can't agree with him any more.(這就是搞笑的= =) The environmental issues are always the most important to a country, especially the country I live in, China.(可以適當(dāng)點(diǎn)出我提出這個(gè)論點(diǎn)的原因,畢竟不存在完全客觀的文章,主觀因素客觀環(huán)境都要適當(dāng)強(qiáng)調(diào))
When the environment is becoming worse and worse, I have to say it is the most serious problem in this country. My junior high classmate , Anita, lived by the end of the Yangtze River. The industrial area is around there and all the factories pollute the water day by day. Unfortunately she got cancer, like many people who lived there.(真人真事,默哀一分鐘) If the polluted environment wants to "kill" you, there is no doctor in this world can save us. Looking at her face in the funeral, I finally understood the importance of protecting environment.(真人真事要寫出細(xì)節(jié)和感覺,否則很難不像流水賬)
It is always early to improve the health care, but never the environment. My dad is the president of the city hospital, and he always tells me "If the government gives us enough money, this hospital can be the best one in this country very quick by hiring best doctors and buying newest equipment."(真人語言描寫,用他人的口說你想說的話) But we all know that the environment is always harder to save. After second industrial revolution in Britain, the pollution in Thames River became horrible. When the British government realized that problem, it took them tens of years to solve it.(用實(shí)例證明) Just like my mom always told me, " It's easy to make something dirty, really hard to make it clean again."
It's kind of like the paradox, but many times, the environmental problems cause many health care issues.(一般考試都是二選一,有時(shí)候你會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)你選的那個(gè)其實(shí)可以導(dǎo)致或**沒選的那個(gè),也就是說這點(diǎn)要是點(diǎn)出來的話,就更證明你的論點(diǎn)的正確性了) Many datas do prove that, the people who live in a good environment have better quailities of lives. In 1970s, LBJ, the president of United States, passed a proposal which was called Clean Water Plan.(真事,積累) It was made to make the water clean in the US, and it did work. The most amazing thing is that the datas show the numbers of patients in hospital decreased rapidly during first 15 years.(瞎編,有一定的事實(shí)根據(jù)) That does prove my point, the environmental issue is a important factor of the health care issues.
As I said, we do realize the seriousness and importance of the environmental issues. We do need a "Heaven" with clean water and air, green trees and beautiful mountains. The "Hell" with doctors and hospitals is always our last choice.(結(jié)尾很重要,搞笑、正經(jīng)、引用都可以)
就這樣,希望大家都成為作文帝。
【小技巧助你托福作文滿分】相關(guān)文章:
三大技巧,助你托福閱讀輕松奪魁03-21
演講小技巧助你面試得高分03-07
托福閱讀滿分的四大技巧解密03-19
托福15個(gè)提分小技巧03-30
托福寫作提分實(shí)用小技巧03-08
托福的考試技巧03-20
托福寫作滿分范文03-22
提高托福口語的技巧03-04
托?谡Z應(yīng)考技巧02-16